The day started with Huncho dreaming about his traumatic experience at an amusement park. A couple years ago huncho was at an amusement park with his friends. There was this brand new roller coaster that everyone had seen on the tv.
"Hey thats the new roller coaster that we saw on tv the other day, do you guys want to go ride it"? said Huncho
"Eh kind of". said friend 1
"It looks kind of scary" said friend 2
"Nah i'm ok, but aye you got it though" said friend 3
"Ok suit yourself" Huncho responded
Huncho went and got in line for the new ride, which was called Morph because it made you feel like your skin was literally morphing. Luckily for huncho the line was short so he could get back with his friend quickly after the ride was over. The line got shorter and shorter and finally it was his turn. Huncho boarded the ride and turned and looked at his friends who were all sitting by one another. The ride started and was going along just fine when all of a sudden Huncho hears this loud noise
"CRRRRREEEEEEEEEKKKKKK"
Huncho immediately starts freaking out as soon as he realizes the ride is stuck upside down at it's highest point. He was stranded with 7 other people for 5 hours until the park and emergency services finally were able to get all the passengers of the broken ride. Huncho immediately woke up sweating bullets.
Huncho sat up in his bed which was soaked from sweat. Huncho got ready and had his daily morning drink of alcohol. He always started the day with a drink of alcohol as he thought it gave him the necessary energy to start the day. He then walked outside to get in his car as he went to work. He was in the position of looking for a job so as of right now he was just doing yard work for people in the town.
After a long day's of work Huncho parked his car and took one long look at his apartment and sighed
"Hmmmmmphhhhh"
1. Really good sentence (plot moving, develops character, really nice sentence)
ReplyDeleteHuncho then grabbed Quan and told him he was acting crazy and that he needed to chill out before he attracted the police and got charged with public drinking.
2. Any question you want to ask?
Is Huncho a more grounded person since he was able to stop himself from spiraling while drunk and Quan wasn’t?
3. Something you’re unclear about?
Why did Huncho and Quan decide to get completely wasted instead of just doing a little bit of drinking?
4. One suggestion to develop character
Delve more into what are Huncho’s internal conflicts that he struggles with.